I don't really remember my first
birthday but my mom said that it was at Valley Green there were 30
people there. And that I threw my homemade on the floor. I would
imagine after that my mom felt bad because she had to clean it up.
My second birthday party was at
McDonald’s the theme was Finding Nemo the cake had Nemo on it I
think. But one present I got was a huge Nemo that when I saw it I
cried apparently I hated it. The person who got it was my Ganny and I
may still have it.
My third birthday was at The house on
Monongalia street. The theme was scooby doo. So I imagine I had a
scooby doo cake.
My fourth birthday was at Cleveland
park in west Virginia. I got my first bike on my 4th
birthday also my mom and dad gave it to me before my party. They did
that because my dad had to work he would have stayed home if he
could.
And my fifth birthday was at my grandma
Linda’s house I had so much fun. It was right before I moved to
Texas with my mom and dad. My theme was curious George and I had a
curious George cake! I can even remember what the cake looked like it
had green icing for grass, and curious George figures on it!
On my sixth birthday we went to Corpus
Kristy it was so fun! I could barely swim but it was so worth it we
ate ate different seafood restaurants all of which were very good. A
drummer even played me a song. One day in Corpus Kristy my dad was
being very generous and decided to get me this really cool shell, so
he grabbed it out of the ocean and we started to walk back to our
hotel. On the way to the hotel my mom threw the shell it turned out
that the shell had a crab in it. So after we found that out we took
it back to the ocean to let it be free. Then it was my birthday I
didn’t really have a cake but one of my presents was the high
school musical movie on DVD. Shortly after that we had to leave I had
a really fun time in Corpus Kristy!
For my seventh birthday we went to
Build-A-Dine its basically the same thing as Build-A-Bear. I made one
of my favorite toys there I named it Trixie she is a triceratops!
Then after that we went to Chili's. I had a early party in Buckannon
to there I had a Horse Ice cream cake it was good!
On my eighth birthday I had a party at
Buckannon with Aly my grandma made the cakes. I dont remember any
presents though. I also ate cupcakes at my house.
And on my ninth birthday it was at my
house were I live at now. My friend Frances was there. And my cake
was a horse cake and it was a horse themed party. It was really fun.
My tenth birthday was when I just got
back from west Virginia. My present were a bike, initial pillow, and
a homemade body pillow! I had a marble cake for that birthday.
And my eleventh birthday well the theme
is the ocean I will have a ocean cake. And there will probably more
very interesting surprises. My grandparents are even coming up for
it!
Andrea,
ReplyDeleteYour first sentence is a run-on. Secondly, numbers should be written in word form. This "And that I threw my homemade on the floor" is a fragment of a sentence. My third birthday was at The house on Monongalia street - The house should not be capitalized. Cleveland park in west Virginia - Park and West should be capitalized. Corpus Christi is mis-spelled.
You didn't even mention going to the Texas Aquarium when you were six.
I'm sorry you're eleventh birthday did not go as planned.
your word count: 584 words
20/25
love mommy