Dear Santa,
I would like a ps3, a 3ds, and if you decide to get me a 3ds id like the wizards of Waverly place game to go with it please, and if you could get Alyson a Barbie that would be great she’s been so good this year she deserves it. You can bring my dad a bigger body pillow as for my mom, bring her some new pants she needs them. And for the cats bring them toys. Alyson told me she would like a snow white Barbie like the one I have. My dad wants a new Playstation 3. My mom would like a new camera or a new phone. Lazarus would like anger management classes. Nemo would like a fluffy pillow to sleep on. Ares would like to stop falling off my parents bed and for Lazarus to stop chasing her. And f you cant get me a 3ds then a Barbie or a webkinz that would be fabulous. As for my dad if you don’t want to get him a new ps3 get him a card saying he can get him whatever he wants from you. Well that’s my wish list for you Merry Christmas Santa and a happy new year.
Sincerely, Andrea
Andrea,
ReplyDeleteYour letter is very nice. You need to work on capitalization more and you have a run on sentence.
Your word count is 206 words
Your score is 23/25
1pt capitalization
1pt run on
love mommy
That is a very nice letter you wrote to santa.And hope you get what you want.And everyone eles to Merry Christmas love grandma
ReplyDeleteAndi, Great letter!! Love Grandma Linda
ReplyDeleteI like that you wrote what everybody would like, not just yourself.
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